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Sunday, April 21, 2013

Village Books Poetry Group: P.I.P.

VBPG site title photo artist DONA REED:
Hand-pulled Relief Print, "Squabbling Ravens" Please visit her site: www.rainshadow-arts.com


Village Books Poetry Group is a fine place to bring in a PIP = poem in progress.  Last Thursday I shared this new poem "PEW" with my group.  One line in the poem started an interesting conversation.  The line is  "Mid service she wiggles like bacon in a hot pan".  Some thought it didn't fit, others said it was "an incredible turning point".

Being apart of a writing group helps you to think outside the work.  Your writing friends can give you a new perspective on work you maybe too deep into to notice.  I find it a most helpful tool.  Whether you write, non-fiction, fantasy, novels or poems, I encourage you to seek out a writing group.  If there isn't one in your area, start one.

Here is my poem in it's original form:


PEW

She sits still at first
Coat on, legs crossed, hair in place
I do not know her name
her smile properly friendly
as she shares the peace

Peace be with you-
-and also with you

Mid service she wiggles like bacon in a hot pan
Her focus moves about the sanctuary; forward, then down at her lap,
the back of the pew, left toward a noisy toddler, then at the ring on her finger.

The ring receives the most attention
the corner of my eye catches repetitive moment
her hand out atop her knee, twirling the ring
round
round
her thumb and forefinger
again
again

Finally, her thoughts become action
Arm reaches for the spine
of  a hymnal laying on it’s back
gone sideways from first service
with a quick flip she corrects
it upright, front forward

Her fingers now at rest,
she turns to smile

This was something easy to fix



If you live in the Bellingham area, or would like more informaiton about how to start a writing group in your area, contact me:  splawssji@yahoo.com

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/VBpoetrygroup/
www.rainshadow-arts.com

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